Best Descriptions of the Haunted House

Sng Wei Zhi ***
Fauzia Amalia ***
Tan Guan Jie ***

Excellent pieces of writing that made the scene vivid to the reader. You made full use of your senses to show us what was happening.

Ideas were logically arranged and managed to keep us on edge wanting to know more.

Till next time 6 Grace writers!

SA...SA ..SAD HAUNTED HOUSE !!!!!!!!!!!

It was one of the sa..sa..sadest day of my life . It all started on friday the 13th. my friend tom and I had decided to go to the so called haunted house which was at the scary forest. We entered the haunted house, we could feel the goose bumps all over our body . In the house we could see a ghost funeral which was surround by ghosts. We half sad and half scared. Then we went to the bedroom there I saw a zombie with a huge sword. It was about to kill me whe tom pushed me away from death but in the end Tom died instead of me dying. Iwas very sa..sa..sad as we came to the haunted house to see only a ghost funerral not a dead tom. I quickly carried t

Tom's body and brought it to his parents. I told them that a zombie killed Tom. They were depressed by thier son;s death that they killed themselves. from that day on I belived that friday the 13th is unlucky day.

done by NirmalKumar

happy haunted house 1

It was raining heavily,Jack and I were desperately finding shelter in the forest.Suddenly,we saw a beautiful mansion,since it was raining,we decided to go in and take shelter from the rain.The creeking sound of the door sent a tiny shiver of unease across my shoulders.When the door was fully opened,I stared in astonishment , inside the house was filled with delicious sweet candy and cookies beyond your wildest imagination.An old cheerful lady greeted us with a smile.She asked if we wanted to stay here till morning as it was raining heavily and geting late.We nodded our heads in agreement.We walked up to the second floor made out of candy,both of us were afraid that the candy would give way and we would fall back down.The old cheerful lady led us to a room made out of candy and we were greatful to her,she smiled to us and vanished.Jack and I stood frozen after seeing what had happened to the old lady,we thought our eyes were playing tricks on us.The old cheerful lady appeared infront of our eyes and was holding a tray of fresh made cookies."would u like some?"the old lady said.

Sad Haunted House-_- (6)

SaD HauNteD HouSe < house is sad~

When the night comes, you could hear the crying of baby from its dark. This horrible thing makes people sorrowful. When you step into it, you would feel the that you have never experienced. Every step you go towards it, you will feel more sad. Then suddenly you will realize how sad the life is. At the end , you will be overwhelmed by the sad and commit suicide. This is why it is known as the' sad haunted house'. Its garen is as big as the pool and the window are as bigand fancy as the church window.But its smell was horrible.

Happy Haunted House ^ . ^

"There is it " I said to my team."This is the house we are going to explore in , people called this house the 'Happy House' because once you step into this house you will come out laughing non stop and will have a disease called the 'Laughter'." I said. I was sent to this place to investigate the house for the weird disease with my team. The villagers told us they have a cure for the disease but it does not work very well. My mission is to find the antidote which may be found in this house . I took a step forward to the house's door , I open the door carefully and once I step in I felt that I could not control my mouth and started to laugh. My team all stared at me ,I tried to control myself and I calmed down .As I took the next step I really could not control myself and I started to laugh . "Oh no , I think I must have have the disease"I said to myself.

The cold and icy haunted house

The thunder and lightning roared as I went into the cold and icy haunted house.there was a sign outside that said,"KEEP OUT!!!".I could not care less.When i opened the door,i saw dead bodies lying all around!!!The foul smell had gotten to me.Recovering from my shock,i went further in to explore the house.The cold and icy feeling really made me wanna cry as there was not a soul in sight.All of a sudden,i saw things which i do not want to see.There were ghosts everywhere!!!!!I ran as fast as my legs could carry me.The pitch darkness indulged me.The next thing I remembered was in my mum's car,going home from a late night horror movie.

Bright Haunted House(1)

"Who said this was a haunted house?!it is practically a old sunshine house..."Theresa complained.She had heard the rumours about this 'haunted' house and had came to check it out.The bookshelf was filled with old brownish books, the curtains were mouldy and the windows were lined with grime...To make it even worse, there was so much light Theresa could see everything clearly. Theresa thought to herself: Wow,this place sure need some dusting and cleaning up.She just notice a menancing stairs and went upstairs.As she crept along, the wooden floorboard creaked.She shivered,she felt cold breath somewhere near her neck.Suddenly,she heard a ear-piercing shriek,Theresa rushed to the place she heard the scream.She gasped,she saw a lady,dead,with a puddle of blood around her.The biggest nightmare of her life was about to start...

SAD HAUNTED HOUSE 1

In the middle of the woods there was a house , it was known to be haunted with ghosts.I walked through the woods wondering how the house would be like.Then i saw an old run-down house, the door was hanging off the hinges, the windows were all broken, and there was even a sign board hanging which read "DANGER!KEEP OUT!" I was starting to have the chills as i went nearer and nearer.I went in the house, it was humongous.Eerie wailing sounds could be heard from miles away.I saw many ghosts on the sitting on the stairs of the castle crying their hearts out!.My face turned blue.Then i fainted.When i woke up i was in an old dirty room with cobwebs at the edge.Pictures of important people were swaying from side to side.Thunder roared and lighting strike the trees outside the castle,it started raining.The cries of the ghosts became louder soon the castle was filled with loud faint cries.I felt terribly sad for them, tears filled with sadness dripped down my face......

Sad haunted house 4

I walked through the forest on a dark night. Thunder went bang. I had a fright. I ran as fast as I could. I saw a house in the middle of the woods and wanted to know what was in there. I walked to the house and knocked on the door. It slowly opened and i stepped in. I started having butterflies in my stomach as the door slammed behind me. I was scared.

Just then, i heard a crying sound. I wanted to know where it came from, so i searched the rooms. I slowly turned the knob and saw a person with a sad face writing on a book.

I did not want to disturb him, so i slowly closed the door and moved on to the next door. i opened the door and saw a toilet bowl and a pail. I guessed that it was the toilet. Next door, I found a woman carrying a baby crying.

She saw me and asked me to sit down. I asked her why she had to stay in this house and she told me that her husband has passed away and she did not have a good job. Her son was still studying and she had to take care of her baby. She had to use candles to light up her room. No wonder the house was always so dark and creepy that no one dared to go in the house.

I felt sad for her and went back home after the rain had stopped to tell my parents about the house in the middle of the woods. My parents were glad that they had a caring son when i told them i wanted to visit the family living in the house in the middle of the woods every weekday after school.

sad haunted house (2)

The sun was setting, allowing only a few rays of golden light to penetrate the dark, grey clouds which hung above Scotland."Its gonna rain cats and dogs!'' Angus Mow bray said to his best friend, Bill Martin. "I agree, and we better find some shelter fast!' Bill replied.It had actually been a fine day for them to go out cycling by the countryside.Now, the sky was threatening to rain.Just as as Bill finished that sentence,a howling,bitter wind stung their faces as it started to rain. A new urgency forced the pair to find a shelter quickly.Just as luck would have it they saw a outline of a house."Looks like we're in luck Angus!''Bill shouted.'let's pull over!"As they got off their bikes the wooden door suddenly opened with a loud creak. Stepping inside, they heard a faint crying sound that that grew louder. As Angus turned on his flashlight with trembling hands, hegot his worst shock ever.In front of them, there was a human with his legs cut off, and about a dozen knifes stuck in his body with blood all over his body crying. wails and moanings was heard as the to boys ran out in fear.Later on, they found out that long time ago, a massacre took place in that very house which Angus and Bill took shelter in...(Tan Guan Jie)

Dark haunted house (6)

it was suddenly raining.lightening flashed and thunder roared loudly.
i and my brother didn't had an umbrella.there was no place for shelter around us except the haunted house.at first, we tried to wait for dad to fetch us but as time passes by, we felt colder and colder.so we had no choice but to enter the haunted house.as we entered the haunted house, we heard an eerie sound which made us scream. then, we saw a white coloured object floating in the air.i screamed and ran out of the house.my brother followed me and said that the object was balloon and there was something mysterious thing going on there.and suggested that we could investigate it.but i said that i don,t want to enter the house ever again.
and i just stand there in the rain without saying anything but just waiting for my dad to come,just hoping that i could immediately get out of this situation.

Dark Hunted House (5)

One day, I was very curious about a dark hunted house, it was said that whoever goes in will get killed, but I did not believed, so I decided to go and take a look.
At midnight, it was raining heavily and there were very loud lighting and thunder storm. As I stepped into a dark, creepy hunted house, it was dark that I can barely see anything. It was so quite that I can even hear my own breathing sound, and I can even feel my heart pumping very fast. I continued walking until i felt that i had stepped into something hard and smelly, so I bent down and tried touching if I can at least know what it was. Instead, I felt that there is a large hand on my shoulder, as i turned around, the thunder flash and I saw a man covered with blood and his eyes were green, and one of his hand were holding a large, sharp knife. I was shocked, but I calm myself down and tried running, I failed. He was so strong and pushed me onto the ground, as he raised the knife, I closed my eyes and realized that the story was true...

The Dark Haunted House (4) Megan

The door creaked open when I opened it.I was disgusted by the sight I seen, I saw pieces of flesh floating around the air.Recovering from my shock,I ran as fast as my legs could carry me away from the creepy house.When i got home,I was panting profusely.My grandma ask me what had happened and i told her that i saw pieces of body parts at the dark haunted house next to the old shopping mall.Then,my grandma told me that there was this story that happen a few years ago.It was said that when the house was first built,a young couple inhabited it with their new born baby.A few years later,after being fired by his boss,the man was desperate.He had no choice but to kill himself and his family.He took a butcher knife from the kitchen and sliced his wife and child into pieces and place them in the refrigerator.Later,the man stab the knife at his heart.Until now when there is a full moon,one may see pieces of body parts floating in the air.

Dark Haunted house 3

There was once a legend that the deserted and dark house on the thirteenth lane would have an extra room which would appear on Friday the thirteenth, in additional to the twelve existing rooms. On the next Friday the thirteenth night, I had to wait until the moon had risen. I pushed the rusty brown door a few inches and peeked inside. It was pitch dark inside but the faint moonlight from the broken window allowed me to see the dusty room. Cobwebs were hanging everywhere and the floorboards creaked with every step I took. The furniture was dusty and I rushed up the stairs as I could feel Goosebumps crawling up my skin. I kept my pace and walked down the hall while murmuring to myself, "one, two, three ... ten, eleven, twelve ... Here it is..." The door was splattered with blood but curiosity killed the cat once again. I searched inside my pocket for a mini torchlight before opening the door and I screamed when I saw a ghastly and pale face which I reconised as my own grinning at me while being hanged inside the room with a few other dead bodies inside. The next thing I remembered was being at home, having a incredulously high fever.

Dark Haunted House 2

Mist was everywhere. Tom, the caretaker of the graveyard, walked into the darkness with caution. He heard shrieks and shouts everytime he made a step. Tom looked above, the windows of the haunted house were shattered. Doors creaked when the wind blew. Tom walked inside the haunted house, he shouted," Anyone here? " No one responded. Tom started feeling scared. He went to explore the rooms inside and he found them all empty. Potraits of people looked at him. Tom felt that someone was looking at him and turned around. Indeed, there was someone. A one-eyed ghost dressed in swimming trunks was staring at him! Tom was scared out of his wits and fainted.

Bright Haunted House 4

Bright but spooky, the exact description for that particular haunted house. At the door, my brother and i were shivering with fear. Curiosity was which had eventually led us in. This, unlike any other haunted houses, was bright, with light shining through the windows. But, the brighter it was, the scarier we were as we could see cobwebs everywhere, blood stains on the floor, and many others. Making our faces as white as a sheet, was seeing a ghost floating around. By then, we had already dashed out of the house, trying to forget everything that we saw.

smelly haunted house 2

marry and i went to the pharmacy nearby our block of flats. we went to the pharmacy and bought our medicine, when we were about to head back for home, we caught sight of something. it had not been there since we moved in last week ago. the door were broken and the air there were eery. our father had told us upteen times not to go in the haunted house.due to our curiousity we went in. it was very smelly and dirty. spiderwebs filled the room. suddenly i saw a lady with long hair lying died on the floor.... (heng yi)

Icy Cold haunted house

A cold icy desolated house stood upright in the middle of a forest of dead trees. Tangled vines and branches like big hands blocked the path to the house. Outside the house, a corroded sign standing ,reading ''Keep out. Thou have been warned.''. The walls of the cold house streaked with green. Empty windows stare at people like eyes, rotting shutters hung beside them. The frost in the house was enough to keep a meat from rotting. There, the shadows danced and the crickets sang. A headless ghost lurks in this vincinity. It had been condemned to stay in the house he was killed. He also promised he would kill anyone who enters. At midnight, the crickets' song will add a desolent note to a shrill scream, so shrill that even a person, as deaf as a beetle, can hear it distinctly. Pots and pans will fly around. The person brave enough to enter the house will by then succumb to the frost. Then he will be killed. The handle of the door knobs were covered with ice and rusted. Indeed a terrifying experience

The Happy Haunted House (yeah right..)

Please note: This is my first posting so if anything goe wrong im sorry.
From Wesley Au Wei Li

CarnEvil.......sure it sounded like an insane carnevil with zombies running here and there but CarnEvil was actually the house of some super crazy fun guy!!He loved horror movies so he called his house CarnEvil.Everything was well until he was murdered by.......... clowns??!
this made a new type of ghost.The insane ghost!they are typically errr...well......insane and laugh maniacly.they may be creepy but they are actually quite friendly if you can ignore that AWFULLY coloured suit.ARGHH!!! MY EYES!!!!!!!!!! ahem...now insane ghosts vary,they may be friendly but they can drive YOU insane sometimes.they can be found anywhere,a circus,a classroom,the school toilet.........anywhere really.Carnevil's ghost however is particularly voilent as it had died unwillingly,as in not ready die yet.The ghost of that crazy man is called Howard.I.B.VERE.BORIN Crank.He reportedly disappeared after 1991.But than again........................nah!That guy in the clown suit behind you probebly isn"t him!

Happy Haunted House (1)

The shiny glimmering light of the moon shone across the streets, making everything look silver. It was a cold and dark night.My brother and i were locked out of the house.There was an eerie silence and it was raining cats and dogs.My brother was in a verge of tears and we decided to spend a night in the haunted house near the streets.The door creaked as i opened the door.I felt a chill down my spine.My brother pulled my shirt and hid behind me.The happy faces of the people in the paintings made me and my brother terrified.We found a nice clean place to sleep on and hoped that this night would end soon.

Bright Haunted house,by ghost number 6

Pushing the huge wooden door of a ruined house, Dulcie laughed,
"this house has no difference from other haunted!who say it is the
scariest ever?What a joke!"Dulcie,laugh,as she cautiously step away from
a hole on the wooden floor.
She looked around,it had no difference from other haunted house,
it has spider webs and spiders around, old curtain that look like rags hung
lose on the side of window,and floor that squeak when you step on it.
Dulcie inspect the room with care, suddenly, she discovered a hidden door
behind the staircase.With care, she turned the old fashion doorknob and gasp.
The room was huge.There was a bookshelf,fill with books that had fragile yellowish
pages,a comfy looking sofa,a pretty wooden table that have clean tea cups and plates on it.
There as even a grant fire place with lot of vases on display.
Dulcie felt curious, she went near to the vases and long to touch the beautiful carves on it.
"ARRRRRGGHHH!"Dulcie screamed as a white vase began to bleed.She back away in fear.
The vase continue to drip bright red substances.
Dulcie froze at the sight of books, which have began to drop one by one down to the ground and had started moving towards her.
Dulcie bolt for the door,as she ran, she step on to the books,which starts to bleed too.
She ran for her life at top speed towards the door only to find it was locked.
Soft music rang out from a corner which Dulcie had not noticed before.
The soft music was now getting louder and louder.Dulcie was now regret about coming to come to this haunted house .
Music was deafening, now to Dulcie, it sound like cruel laughter,which was laughing at her foolishness.
But what Dulcie don't know, is that the nightmare had just begin.


By Theresa ><

The Sad Haunted House(5)

The haunted house in Street 23 was never entered as it was rumoured to have a strange history. Out of curiousity, my brother and I sneeked into the house at 11 P.M.. As we walked in, we could hear the silent drips of water around us. It looked like nobody was home. Out of a sudden, a werewolf appered. It looks like it was crying! Hoping that it will not notice, we creeped silently into a room with a black sign saying "Thou will not pass". Ignoring the it, we entered the room. In it, we saw a vampire wearing a yellow cape weeping and sucking his own tears! Strange, vampires were supposed to suck blood! Then it turned into a bird! My brother and I ran as fast our legs could carry us. Then, we arrived int the kitchen. We caught sight of a witch with orange skin. She was baking a cake out of sand! Shocked, we ran out of the house. We would never enter that strange house ever again

The bright haunted house (2)

It was dead in the middle of the night . There lies a village beside a cemeterey. That village is almost dead,yet alive and kicking .There was not a single noise to be heard except the soft thumping of the shoes that my siblings and I were wearing .My brother's friends dared my siblings and I to go into a bright haunted house . My brother dislikes to be looked down ,he even had a bet with his friends ! He agreed to this dare,and we were supposed to stay there until the next day at 5o'clock. We walked into this bright but spooky haunted house with anxiousness . We walked in, but soon found, hey , this house, it is not that bit spooky !We heaved a sigh of relieve ,glad that it was not spooky an we will win the money in this bet .There was not a single cobweb , but in one of the rooms , there was this window, you could see that outside the window ,was a horrid view of a cemetery , my sister was paralysed with fear when she saw ghosts floating towards the window .(She hates ghosts and is very afraid of them, even ghost stories ! She wanted to win the bet as she wanted to buy a bottle of very expensive perfume !And tags along.)I could see her rooted to the ground paralysed with fear .I looked at those freaky ghosts , I was curious as I have never seen a ghost before , but at the same time ,frightening thoughts raced through my mind, seeing a ghost with a devilish on his face strangling me ,but I soon came back to reality .We never slept in that room , we preservered until 3o'clock when we heard a loud knock on the door .(sounds like screeching) We hid behind the door until the screeching stopped . I occupied myself by eating,my brother occupied himself by playing his PSP ,while my sister occupied herself by listening to rock music . We kept ourselves occupied until we could not take it anymore . We cannot care less about losing the bet , we were so horror-strucked that my hands had turned clammy and we broke out into cold sweat. We took our luggage , looked out of that ghastly window, looking for those ghosts, I think they went to sleep , so we grabbed that great chance and ran out of that very bright house that was haunted. We ran out at 4.30a.m. Not wanting to lose the bet but we don't care (heck care). We RAN and RAN until I had difficulty breathing .But the tension in my muscles eased .(phew !) In the end , my brother and I had to take our own money to pay my sister for that very expensive perfume ! (how rotten!)

THE ICY COLD HAUNTED HOUSE(2)

(The) Thunder roared and flashes of lightning threatened to tear the night sky. Snow blurred the distant images of the buildings. I strained my eyes to see what laid ahead. The roof of the haunted house was covered with ice. Gusts of wind slammed against the gaping windows. I moved closer and closer to the house. The moment i stepped into the house, i was greeted by the creaking sound of the old door. My hand were clammy and my face was as pale as a sheet. The floor was slippery and i lost my balance and i slipped. I landed with a loud thud and the old door opened, there is a very old man lying right in front of the old door lying dead on the floor. (Gaining my equanimity, i ran out as fast as i could.)

Second half is better and more original. Try not to use descriptions that are memorised. It's so much better when you create your own visuals. Some good images of the icy house.

ICY COLD HAUNTED HOUSE(1) sekwon

It has been 11 months and half that my country in the middle of nowhere has been attacked by the terrible snowman. I was tired of playing with snow and abhore to study in the dark old smelly room. My father is a pilot but he could not come to our country as the whether is too terrible. Ice fishing is a best activity for wasting time which is slow like a snail climbing up the well. I and my sister was curious about the old house which was emptied for more than 1year. My mother told me that there was a rich man who lived there but was passed away as someone locked him in the icy cold fridge. She added," after the man died, this country has been colder and colder." I was curious how it looks like and decide to enter the old crippy house which is about 30 years old.


Be careful with your verb tenses - try to stick to 1 verb tense only for the time being.
Launch yourself straight into the description. See how I rewrite your ideas:

The old creepy house stood white and lonely. The windows were barely visible below the thick ice. The biting cold air lashed at my face and seemed increasingly loud.

The bright haunted house 3

(It was the afternoon. My sister and I were mischievous and we were thinking if we should give the most scariest 'bright haunted house' a visit. When we arrived at the haunted house,)

I heard ringing bells in my mind telling me not to enter but I did not heed (its) their advice. My sister and I skipped inside and we saw creepy staircases full of cobwebs (and mummies all) over (it) them.

(We actually thought that the haunted house was dark and creepy but this one was not. It was like the normal days where we see big sun. This was more creepy than those dark haunted houses.We went through those full of cobwebs' staircases and we saw what we will never forget in our entire lifes.) (It's important not to tell the reader too much - show what you see)

A ghost dressed in white like an angel but one with fangs drifted around the house. There was a human on the floor and the ghost was sucking its blood !! Our cold sweat(s) dripped down and it made the sound,"dip..dip.." The ghost heard our sweat and turned around, (freaking) scaring us!

You had some good ideas and should concentrate on using your senses to describe what you see/ hear. When you tell too much, the writing slows down and the reader loses interest.

The bright haunted house

(My brother and I were standing in the queue to see the haunted house, we were up next. The staff ushered us into the haunted house.)

I shivered with excitement , wondering what would be inside (the haunted house). I thought I was dreaming. The haunted house was filled with people, normal people. My mouth opened wide in shock, for this was not what I expected at all. It was very noisy. But suddenly, I spotted a woman biting into her sandwich and in her mouth there was a pair of fangs. I screamed loudly and all eyes were on me . All of the people walked towards me simultaneously.

I grabbed hold of my brother's hand and started running towards the exit. That was the scariest haunted house ever.

Why don't you show me more of what you didn't expect - as that is an interesting point - the reader needs more visuals.