Spiderman swooped down from the clouds. While the spectators cheered, Spiderman fought his enemy, the Scorpion King. He shot his web all around the sky like a bird's nest.
Finally, Spiderman forced the Scorpion King to a dead end, where its grave was. Crowds cheered,"Hooray! Spiderman is our hero!!" Flashes of lights (shined) shone (through their) into his eyes. Spiderman (is) was gone(,) and will (never) not return till there is trouble.
No trouble, no spiderman.
Mrs Chien:Yes, I can see Spiderman because the verbs and vocabulary you used effectively showed me the action. Also I can hear the excited crowd.
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