Icy Cold haunted house

A cold icy desolated house stood upright in the middle of a forest of dead trees. Tangled vines and branches like big hands blocked the path to the house. Outside the house, a corroded sign standing ,reading ''Keep out. Thou have been warned.''. The walls of the cold house streaked with green. Empty windows stare at people like eyes, rotting shutters hung beside them. The frost in the house was enough to keep a meat from rotting. There, the shadows danced and the crickets sang. A headless ghost lurks in this vincinity. It had been condemned to stay in the house he was killed. He also promised he would kill anyone who enters. At midnight, the crickets' song will add a desolent note to a shrill scream, so shrill that even a person, as deaf as a beetle, can hear it distinctly. Pots and pans will fly around. The person brave enough to enter the house will by then succumb to the frost. Then he will be killed. The handle of the door knobs were covered with ice and rusted. Indeed a terrifying experience

The Happy Haunted House (yeah right..)

Please note: This is my first posting so if anything goe wrong im sorry.
From Wesley Au Wei Li

CarnEvil.......sure it sounded like an insane carnevil with zombies running here and there but CarnEvil was actually the house of some super crazy fun guy!!He loved horror movies so he called his house CarnEvil.Everything was well until he was murdered by.......... clowns??!
this made a new type of ghost.The insane ghost!they are typically errr...well......insane and laugh maniacly.they may be creepy but they are actually quite friendly if you can ignore that AWFULLY coloured suit.ARGHH!!! MY EYES!!!!!!!!!! ahem...now insane ghosts vary,they may be friendly but they can drive YOU insane sometimes.they can be found anywhere,a circus,a classroom,the school toilet.........anywhere really.Carnevil's ghost however is particularly voilent as it had died unwillingly,as in not ready die yet.The ghost of that crazy man is called Howard.I.B.VERE.BORIN Crank.He reportedly disappeared after 1991.But than again........................nah!That guy in the clown suit behind you probebly isn"t him!

Happy Haunted House (1)

The shiny glimmering light of the moon shone across the streets, making everything look silver. It was a cold and dark night.My brother and i were locked out of the house.There was an eerie silence and it was raining cats and dogs.My brother was in a verge of tears and we decided to spend a night in the haunted house near the streets.The door creaked as i opened the door.I felt a chill down my spine.My brother pulled my shirt and hid behind me.The happy faces of the people in the paintings made me and my brother terrified.We found a nice clean place to sleep on and hoped that this night would end soon.

Bright Haunted house,by ghost number 6

Pushing the huge wooden door of a ruined house, Dulcie laughed,
"this house has no difference from other haunted!who say it is the
scariest ever?What a joke!"Dulcie,laugh,as she cautiously step away from
a hole on the wooden floor.
She looked around,it had no difference from other haunted house,
it has spider webs and spiders around, old curtain that look like rags hung
lose on the side of window,and floor that squeak when you step on it.
Dulcie inspect the room with care, suddenly, she discovered a hidden door
behind the staircase.With care, she turned the old fashion doorknob and gasp.
The room was huge.There was a bookshelf,fill with books that had fragile yellowish
pages,a comfy looking sofa,a pretty wooden table that have clean tea cups and plates on it.
There as even a grant fire place with lot of vases on display.
Dulcie felt curious, she went near to the vases and long to touch the beautiful carves on it.
"ARRRRRGGHHH!"Dulcie screamed as a white vase began to bleed.She back away in fear.
The vase continue to drip bright red substances.
Dulcie froze at the sight of books, which have began to drop one by one down to the ground and had started moving towards her.
Dulcie bolt for the door,as she ran, she step on to the books,which starts to bleed too.
She ran for her life at top speed towards the door only to find it was locked.
Soft music rang out from a corner which Dulcie had not noticed before.
The soft music was now getting louder and louder.Dulcie was now regret about coming to come to this haunted house .
Music was deafening, now to Dulcie, it sound like cruel laughter,which was laughing at her foolishness.
But what Dulcie don't know, is that the nightmare had just begin.


By Theresa ><

The Sad Haunted House(5)

The haunted house in Street 23 was never entered as it was rumoured to have a strange history. Out of curiousity, my brother and I sneeked into the house at 11 P.M.. As we walked in, we could hear the silent drips of water around us. It looked like nobody was home. Out of a sudden, a werewolf appered. It looks like it was crying! Hoping that it will not notice, we creeped silently into a room with a black sign saying "Thou will not pass". Ignoring the it, we entered the room. In it, we saw a vampire wearing a yellow cape weeping and sucking his own tears! Strange, vampires were supposed to suck blood! Then it turned into a bird! My brother and I ran as fast our legs could carry us. Then, we arrived int the kitchen. We caught sight of a witch with orange skin. She was baking a cake out of sand! Shocked, we ran out of the house. We would never enter that strange house ever again

The bright haunted house (2)

It was dead in the middle of the night . There lies a village beside a cemeterey. That village is almost dead,yet alive and kicking .There was not a single noise to be heard except the soft thumping of the shoes that my siblings and I were wearing .My brother's friends dared my siblings and I to go into a bright haunted house . My brother dislikes to be looked down ,he even had a bet with his friends ! He agreed to this dare,and we were supposed to stay there until the next day at 5o'clock. We walked into this bright but spooky haunted house with anxiousness . We walked in, but soon found, hey , this house, it is not that bit spooky !We heaved a sigh of relieve ,glad that it was not spooky an we will win the money in this bet .There was not a single cobweb , but in one of the rooms , there was this window, you could see that outside the window ,was a horrid view of a cemetery , my sister was paralysed with fear when she saw ghosts floating towards the window .(She hates ghosts and is very afraid of them, even ghost stories ! She wanted to win the bet as she wanted to buy a bottle of very expensive perfume !And tags along.)I could see her rooted to the ground paralysed with fear .I looked at those freaky ghosts , I was curious as I have never seen a ghost before , but at the same time ,frightening thoughts raced through my mind, seeing a ghost with a devilish on his face strangling me ,but I soon came back to reality .We never slept in that room , we preservered until 3o'clock when we heard a loud knock on the door .(sounds like screeching) We hid behind the door until the screeching stopped . I occupied myself by eating,my brother occupied himself by playing his PSP ,while my sister occupied herself by listening to rock music . We kept ourselves occupied until we could not take it anymore . We cannot care less about losing the bet , we were so horror-strucked that my hands had turned clammy and we broke out into cold sweat. We took our luggage , looked out of that ghastly window, looking for those ghosts, I think they went to sleep , so we grabbed that great chance and ran out of that very bright house that was haunted. We ran out at 4.30a.m. Not wanting to lose the bet but we don't care (heck care). We RAN and RAN until I had difficulty breathing .But the tension in my muscles eased .(phew !) In the end , my brother and I had to take our own money to pay my sister for that very expensive perfume ! (how rotten!)

THE ICY COLD HAUNTED HOUSE(2)

(The) Thunder roared and flashes of lightning threatened to tear the night sky. Snow blurred the distant images of the buildings. I strained my eyes to see what laid ahead. The roof of the haunted house was covered with ice. Gusts of wind slammed against the gaping windows. I moved closer and closer to the house. The moment i stepped into the house, i was greeted by the creaking sound of the old door. My hand were clammy and my face was as pale as a sheet. The floor was slippery and i lost my balance and i slipped. I landed with a loud thud and the old door opened, there is a very old man lying right in front of the old door lying dead on the floor. (Gaining my equanimity, i ran out as fast as i could.)

Second half is better and more original. Try not to use descriptions that are memorised. It's so much better when you create your own visuals. Some good images of the icy house.

ICY COLD HAUNTED HOUSE(1) sekwon

It has been 11 months and half that my country in the middle of nowhere has been attacked by the terrible snowman. I was tired of playing with snow and abhore to study in the dark old smelly room. My father is a pilot but he could not come to our country as the whether is too terrible. Ice fishing is a best activity for wasting time which is slow like a snail climbing up the well. I and my sister was curious about the old house which was emptied for more than 1year. My mother told me that there was a rich man who lived there but was passed away as someone locked him in the icy cold fridge. She added," after the man died, this country has been colder and colder." I was curious how it looks like and decide to enter the old crippy house which is about 30 years old.


Be careful with your verb tenses - try to stick to 1 verb tense only for the time being.
Launch yourself straight into the description. See how I rewrite your ideas:

The old creepy house stood white and lonely. The windows were barely visible below the thick ice. The biting cold air lashed at my face and seemed increasingly loud.

The bright haunted house 3

(It was the afternoon. My sister and I were mischievous and we were thinking if we should give the most scariest 'bright haunted house' a visit. When we arrived at the haunted house,)

I heard ringing bells in my mind telling me not to enter but I did not heed (its) their advice. My sister and I skipped inside and we saw creepy staircases full of cobwebs (and mummies all) over (it) them.

(We actually thought that the haunted house was dark and creepy but this one was not. It was like the normal days where we see big sun. This was more creepy than those dark haunted houses.We went through those full of cobwebs' staircases and we saw what we will never forget in our entire lifes.) (It's important not to tell the reader too much - show what you see)

A ghost dressed in white like an angel but one with fangs drifted around the house. There was a human on the floor and the ghost was sucking its blood !! Our cold sweat(s) dripped down and it made the sound,"dip..dip.." The ghost heard our sweat and turned around, (freaking) scaring us!

You had some good ideas and should concentrate on using your senses to describe what you see/ hear. When you tell too much, the writing slows down and the reader loses interest.

The bright haunted house

(My brother and I were standing in the queue to see the haunted house, we were up next. The staff ushered us into the haunted house.)

I shivered with excitement , wondering what would be inside (the haunted house). I thought I was dreaming. The haunted house was filled with people, normal people. My mouth opened wide in shock, for this was not what I expected at all. It was very noisy. But suddenly, I spotted a woman biting into her sandwich and in her mouth there was a pair of fangs. I screamed loudly and all eyes were on me . All of the people walked towards me simultaneously.

I grabbed hold of my brother's hand and started running towards the exit. That was the scariest haunted house ever.

Why don't you show me more of what you didn't expect - as that is an interesting point - the reader needs more visuals.