It has been 11 months and half that my country in the middle of nowhere has been attacked by the terrible snowman. I was tired of playing with snow and abhore to study in the dark old smelly room. My father is a pilot but he could not come to our country as the whether is too terrible. Ice fishing is a best activity for wasting time which is slow like a snail climbing up the well. I and my sister was curious about the old house which was emptied for more than 1year. My mother told me that there was a rich man who lived there but was passed away as someone locked him in the icy cold fridge. She added," after the man died, this country has been colder and colder." I was curious how it looks like and decide to enter the old crippy house which is about 30 years old.
Be careful with your verb tenses - try to stick to 1 verb tense only for the time being.
Launch yourself straight into the description. See how I rewrite your ideas:
The old creepy house stood white and lonely. The windows were barely visible below the thick ice. The biting cold air lashed at my face and seemed increasingly loud.
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