THE ICY COLD HAUNTED HOUSE(2)

(The) Thunder roared and flashes of lightning threatened to tear the night sky. Snow blurred the distant images of the buildings. I strained my eyes to see what laid ahead. The roof of the haunted house was covered with ice. Gusts of wind slammed against the gaping windows. I moved closer and closer to the house. The moment i stepped into the house, i was greeted by the creaking sound of the old door. My hand were clammy and my face was as pale as a sheet. The floor was slippery and i lost my balance and i slipped. I landed with a loud thud and the old door opened, there is a very old man lying right in front of the old door lying dead on the floor. (Gaining my equanimity, i ran out as fast as i could.)

Second half is better and more original. Try not to use descriptions that are memorised. It's so much better when you create your own visuals. Some good images of the icy house.

ICY COLD HAUNTED HOUSE(1) sekwon

It has been 11 months and half that my country in the middle of nowhere has been attacked by the terrible snowman. I was tired of playing with snow and abhore to study in the dark old smelly room. My father is a pilot but he could not come to our country as the whether is too terrible. Ice fishing is a best activity for wasting time which is slow like a snail climbing up the well. I and my sister was curious about the old house which was emptied for more than 1year. My mother told me that there was a rich man who lived there but was passed away as someone locked him in the icy cold fridge. She added," after the man died, this country has been colder and colder." I was curious how it looks like and decide to enter the old crippy house which is about 30 years old.


Be careful with your verb tenses - try to stick to 1 verb tense only for the time being.
Launch yourself straight into the description. See how I rewrite your ideas:

The old creepy house stood white and lonely. The windows were barely visible below the thick ice. The biting cold air lashed at my face and seemed increasingly loud.

The bright haunted house 3

(It was the afternoon. My sister and I were mischievous and we were thinking if we should give the most scariest 'bright haunted house' a visit. When we arrived at the haunted house,)

I heard ringing bells in my mind telling me not to enter but I did not heed (its) their advice. My sister and I skipped inside and we saw creepy staircases full of cobwebs (and mummies all) over (it) them.

(We actually thought that the haunted house was dark and creepy but this one was not. It was like the normal days where we see big sun. This was more creepy than those dark haunted houses.We went through those full of cobwebs' staircases and we saw what we will never forget in our entire lifes.) (It's important not to tell the reader too much - show what you see)

A ghost dressed in white like an angel but one with fangs drifted around the house. There was a human on the floor and the ghost was sucking its blood !! Our cold sweat(s) dripped down and it made the sound,"dip..dip.." The ghost heard our sweat and turned around, (freaking) scaring us!

You had some good ideas and should concentrate on using your senses to describe what you see/ hear. When you tell too much, the writing slows down and the reader loses interest.

The bright haunted house

(My brother and I were standing in the queue to see the haunted house, we were up next. The staff ushered us into the haunted house.)

I shivered with excitement , wondering what would be inside (the haunted house). I thought I was dreaming. The haunted house was filled with people, normal people. My mouth opened wide in shock, for this was not what I expected at all. It was very noisy. But suddenly, I spotted a woman biting into her sandwich and in her mouth there was a pair of fangs. I screamed loudly and all eyes were on me . All of the people walked towards me simultaneously.

I grabbed hold of my brother's hand and started running towards the exit. That was the scariest haunted house ever.

Why don't you show me more of what you didn't expect - as that is an interesting point - the reader needs more visuals.

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A question?

we all know that usually we use black and opaque paper for experiment right? but why can't we use other opaque paper like dark purple or yellow???

others form of energy

If energy used in Singapore (oil and natural gas) were depleted we can use renewable energy such as:
· Solar energy(solar panels)
· Wind energy (windmills, wind turbines)
· Tidal energy/wave energy(from a dam)
· Biofuels(plant) used in cars as petrol

Renewable energy now produce 13% of the world electrical:
Hydropower 2-3% and others including wind, solar, and marine energy together - less than 1%

Singapore average daily max temp: 30.9ºC / average daily temp: 23.9ºC
1) Solar panels which can produce 115watt of electricity cost average $640.
2) Shortage of land to build a solar energy power station.
Wind energy is a clean fuel source. Wind is actually a form of solar energy caused by the heating of the atmosphere by the sun, the rotation of the earth, and the earth's surface irregularities. It is intermittent (not constant)Biofuels can be defined as solid, liquid, or gas fuel derived from biomass.
The first batch of biofuels used new plants natural sugar to make biofuels. This may lead to shortage of food as we do not have any extra land for growing our crops.
Examples of plant ethanol: sugar beets, sugar cane, corn, wheat and barley. Most trees and grasses are made of cellulose, which can also be converted into sugar, although not as easily as starch.

harness the energy produced

When we walk, heat energy will be produced. The solar cells underneath the shoes will take in the heat energy and stored the energy into the solar cells. The solar cells which are connected to the user’s bag by a series of wires will be changed into electrical energy to charge any electrical devises in the bag. So we will not have to worry about batteries being flat because we have a portable ‘electrical charger’!!!!!!

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Alternative source of kinetic energy

We can use the movement of cars on the road to make a machine that can absorb carbon dioxide which can help SAVE THE EARTH.

Alternative Source of Electrical Energy

Alternate sources of energy:

The first option we could use is hydro-electric energy which seems to be expensive but much more convenient than that of a windmill as the wind is unpredictable resulting to a unsteady supply. Hydro-electric energy are much more constant as the water will be rushing at it most of the time - unless there is a drought of course. 
The other source would be the wind mill.Yes, it has an unsteady supply but it is much CHEAPER than Solar energy. And it's enviromentally friendly too! (well, it should be...)
Moving on, We have the Solar panels. Solar energy is good and enviromentally freindly but what's that? Yes, it is VERY EXTREMELY EXPENSIVE. And, we need a great amount of solar energy to have an adequate amount of electricity. Another fault, at night, we won't get any energy, unless there's a device which saves the electricity of course!!! 
So what should we do is there's not enough electricity? Two answers:
1) Use less electricity!
2) Combine the electricity from the alternate sources!

Fauzia's note: Hello! I managed to sneak on to the computer to do this!Anyway, If I did something on my answer that shouldn't be there, please tell me! Thank you!