She took out a notebook and called out the ('criminals') names(, ) (mine friends) Justin and Pete prayed hard (to god to let them off this and the only time but they all know what was going to happen to them.) not to be on the list.
When their names (was) were being call they knew that they are going to bear the consequnces of damaging the school property.Last week, when they are being questioned by the disipline misstress they denied it but the dissipline misstress found out who was the culprit. So today they are going to be caned!When the disipline misstress gave the order the teacher hold up the can and slash,that hurt!! screamed of pain echoed the hall and that certainly sent down shrill down mine spine,mine hands feel wet and numb.....
Mrs Chien: In the first part, there is an attempt at using your senses to make observations at what was happening in the hall. That is good.
But in the second part, you revert back to telling the reader eveything and the story immediately lost originality and momentum.
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