I watched in amusement as I saw the (ever so scary) Discipline Mistress (gave) give a lecture to HongWei (, a very annoying boy,) outside the noisy hall.
(The discipline Mistress was wearing a blue, long-sleeved shirt and pink skirt which looked tight on her chubby body.)(1)
Her face (was) looked frightening (with all the frowns) as she frowned and her angry eyes ( they were serious, angry and) were piercing sharp. Her gray and black hair was up in a bun and her glasses (were) dangling (off) on the tip of her nose shook with every word that came out of her mouth. ( her hands were on her hips clenched into a fist.)
I took a glance at the terrified Hong Wei and scurried into the hall, not wanting to meet the Discipline Misstress' eyes. (I saw the Discipline Mistress dismiss Hong Wei off, who was sobbing quietly.)
Mrs Chien: Some excellent observations make us see the Discipline Mistress well.
Physical descriptions can often be awkward, so refrain from using them. Instead describe people's actions which always lead to a more vivid picture.
Notice that by adding the phrase in red, I allow you to see how scary she is - I didn't need to tell you she was scary.
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