SAD HAUNTED HOUSE 1

In the middle of the woods there was a house , it was known to be haunted with ghosts.I walked through the woods wondering how the house would be like.Then i saw an old run-down house, the door was hanging off the hinges, the windows were all broken, and there was even a sign board hanging which read "DANGER!KEEP OUT!" I was starting to have the chills as i went nearer and nearer.I went in the house, it was humongous.Eerie wailing sounds could be heard from miles away.I saw many ghosts on the sitting on the stairs of the castle crying their hearts out!.My face turned blue.Then i fainted.When i woke up i was in an old dirty room with cobwebs at the edge.Pictures of important people were swaying from side to side.Thunder roared and lighting strike the trees outside the castle,it started raining.The cries of the ghosts became louder soon the castle was filled with loud faint cries.I felt terribly sad for them, tears filled with sadness dripped down my face......

Marathon Runner 4 / Best Marathon Runner***

My heart was beating fast as the official man (said) bellowed, "Ready? Get set... Go!!!" I ran as fast as i could. Thousands of people were running all at once. The noise soon became louder and louder so that it could be heard from miles away.

After a while we (reach) reached (to) a sign (where it) which read Mile One. Torturous days of training had paid off. (After) Hearing my family cheering me on, I felt a surge of energy and I started dashing through person after person like a horse in a race.

Mrs Chien: Observations effectively bring the reader to the scene! The wonderful caomparison at the end is original and impactful.
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