6 Grace @ Bukit Timah Primary: smelly haunted house 2

Friday, March 07, 2008

smelly haunted house 2

marry and i went to the pharmacy nearby our block of flats. we went to the pharmacy and bought our medicine, when we were about to head back for home, we caught sight of something. it had not been there since we moved in last week ago. the door were broken and the air there were eery. our father had told us upteen times not to go in the haunted house.due to our curiousity we went in. it was very smelly and dirty. spiderwebs filled the room. suddenly i saw a lady with long hair lying died on the floor.... (heng yi)

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KUDOS for Best Settings

Fear Pie' s and Eugene' s settings were voted best by 6 Grace pupils.

They received an overwhelming 28 votes each!

They used the words that I know but made the setting much better!

Both settings can be imagined or visualised and felt!

SeKwon

Eugene's setting reveals one point form the main event. It gives me a clue of what the main event is about!

I like the words 'untamed' wind as they form a picutre in my mind almost immediately.

Natalie

I intend to copy the similes and express my feelings. I also want to imagine myself at the scene so that I can describe better!

Charmaine

About Simple Words

The 6 Grace writers teach me that simple words mixed in a sentence can really create a clear picture in my mind. It's really like a puzzle - you use a SUITABLE word and MATCH!

In order to "Show", not 'Tell', I have to add more feelings and expression to let the reader feel and picture the image of what's happening!

Jordan

Do not write the same way you speak!

Natalie

*Even simple words can stand out from others.
*Make similes that are original.
*Use action-packed verbs when the situation is critical.
*Link paragraphs.
*Try not to be out of point!

Chao Jun

Chosen vocabulary can be simple but effective.
Do not digress!
Try not to use the same word over again and again.

Eugene

In Summary

1) One doesn't need to use excellent vocabulary all the time but we must try to use a varied language.
2) Sentence structure helps when you write as it gives readers a complete story, not bits and pieces.
3) "Showing" helps build excitement.
4) Verbs are useful to express actions, feelings and emotions.

Daniel

Simple words can also make a story interesting. As writers, we need to to choose relevant words to spice up the story and make the reader WANT to continue reading on.

Clarissa

The 6 Grace writers used simple words for what they imagine - trees, vehicles and vases - and write what they see.

I should do some planning on simple words I can use and have a broad mind!

Darren

Chosen vocabulary can be simple but needs to be correctly placed.

The 6 Grace authors taught me that under pressure, we must still think of descriptive words.

Even the simplest word like 'red' will make the composition stand out.

I will remember to describe my emotions next time.

Charmaine

Phrase my sentences well and choose the right words.
A word can express feelings and thoughts.
Use similes and describe things well!

A few decorative words can light up the whole composition.

Theresa

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